Task 4 - Read the Writing Strategy. Does the writer follow all of the advice? Give examples - SHS Friends Global 11 page 45

1. Nội dung câu hỏi

Writing Strategy 

1. Divide your essay into an introduction, main body and conclusion.

2. If the task has more than one element, deal with them in different paragraphs within the main body.

3. Use formal language.

4. Support opinions with evidence or examples.

Most people agree that the lack of exercise in teenagers' lives is a serious problem. But what are the causes of this problem and what can we do to address them?

I strongly believe that today's teenagers spend too much time playing on electronic gadgets. They hardly ever do outdoor activities and this is why many of them do not get enough exercise. What is more, many teenagers are overweight and this makes them less willing to do

exercise.

In order to tackle this problem, a number of measures are necessary. In my view, it is unrealistic to limit the amount of time teenagers spend on gadgets. What I propose instead is that we make sure school canteens only serve healthy food. Furthermore, I would strongly

recommend that we give all teenagers free membership of their local sports facilities.

To conclude, lack of exercise can cause long-term health problems, so it is vital that we act now. It seems to me that the measures I propose will begin to remedy the situation.

2. Phương pháp giải

Đọc Chiến lược viết. Người viết có làm theo tất cả các lời khuyên không? Cho ví dụ.

3. Lời giải chi tiết

Yes, the writer follows all of the advice in the Writing Strategy.

- Introduction: The writer states the topic of the essay in the first sentence: "Most people agree that the lack of exercise in teenagers' lives is a serious problem." She then states her thesis statement in the second sentence: "But what are the causes of this problem and what can we

do to address them?"

- Main body: The writer deals with the causes of the problem in the first paragraph and solutions to the problem in the second paragraph.

- Formal language: The writer avoids contractions and informal expressions throughout the essay. For example, she writes "teenagers spend too much time" instead of "teenagers spend a lot of time."

- Evidence and examples: The writer supports her opinions with evidence and examples, such as the fact that many teenagers spend too much time playing on electronic gadgets and that many teenagers are overweight. For example, in the first paragraph, she writes: "They hardly

ever do outdoor activities and this is why many of them do not get enough exercise."